教師解析2015年01月29日雅思寫(xiě)作范文

Writing Task 1
　　流程圖：
　　The diagram below shows how fruit is canned.
       

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

題目分析：
　　流程圖3個(gè)月左右會(huì)出現(xiàn)一次，審題方面：
　　1. 注意細(xì)節(jié)，不要遺漏信息；
　　2. 不要畏懼生詞；
　　3. 復(fù)雜程序適當(dāng)合并。
　　
　　行文方面：
　　·時(shí)態(tài)：多用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)；
　　·語(yǔ)態(tài)：被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)居多；
　　·句式：綜合運(yùn)用不同句式，如從句、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞等；
　　·用詞：靈活運(yùn)用表示順序的詞，如
　　at first, initially, in the first stage/step;
　　previous, preceding, before, prior to;
　　then, next, following, after, subsequent;
　　finally, eventually

Sample answer:

Given is a flow chart illustrating a series of steps by which fruit is canned.

Prior to the actual canning process, it is first necessary for fresh fruit to be picked manually from trees. It is then transported to the cannery to get washed. After that, the clean fruit needs to pass a strict quality checking process. The ones with scars will be rejected while those with satisfactory quality will subsequently go through a cold storing process at a temperature below 0℃. Next, the fruit will be weighed and graded to ensure that the selected ones are of similar size. In the following stage, the fruit will be peeled, cored and sliced in order to be put into the cans.

When the cans are filled, they will be sealed and cooked over heat for sterilization. Once the cans cool down, they are labeled individually and stored together before the final despatch.

Thus, the diagram clearly demonstrates the canning procedure from fresh fruit to the final cans to be consumed in the market.

相關(guān)真題備考素材：C6T3, C8T3.

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Writing Task 2
　　Currently, some scientists or travelers like to travel to remote natural environment such as the South Pole. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

題目分析：
　　提問(wèn)方式：辯論類；
　　作文題材：環(huán)境類；

　　提綱：
　　觀點(diǎn)：遠(yuǎn)游各有優(yōu)劣，但綜合來(lái)說(shuō)劣勢(shì)居多
　　主體段一（讓步：討論遠(yuǎn)游的優(yōu)勢(shì)） 科學(xué)家深入探索自然、發(fā)現(xiàn)未知、促進(jìn)人類進(jìn)步；游者拓展視野，超越自我
　　主體段二（重點(diǎn)討論遠(yuǎn)游的劣勢(shì)） 少人涉足之地通常交通、設(shè)施落后，存在安全隱患；人類活動(dòng)會(huì)對(duì)自然環(huán)境造成影響
　　結(jié)尾段 遠(yuǎn)行雖是大勢(shì)所趨，但總體劣勢(shì)較多

Sample answer：
　　The advancement of science and technology has rendered traveling to remote areas no longer a dream. Recent years have been witnessing the increasing popularity of distant places among scientists and travelers for natural exploration. While there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary, I personally believe that the drawbacks of remote traveling override its benefits.（while做并列連詞，表對(duì)比）

Granted, the mystery of faraway areas makes them extremely attractive to adventurers. It is human nature to explore the unknown, and the human history is a relentless process of discovering the new. Only by the unceasing examination are we able to achieve breakthroughs and march forward in terms of both individuals as well as the society as a whole.（倒裝句）

On the other hand, the sheer charm of remote places itself cannot ensure pleasant journeys. First and foremost, distant areas are poorly equipped more often than not. Many devices are just unable to work in extreme natural environment like the South Pole, which partially explains our limited knowledge of such places.（非限制性定語(yǔ)從句）Thus, visitors would be in peril in case of an emergency, since the visitors may not get treated timely or simply not treated at all if they get no companions.（原因狀語(yǔ)從句）In addition, human activities may exert adverse influence on the natural environment, and it is always too late before we realize the consequences of our actions.

In the final analysis, I concede that it is probably an irreversible trend to travel to remote places with the development of modern society.（賓語(yǔ)從句）Nonetheless, we should be cautious about distant visits considering safety factors at the present stage and potential effects that we may produce on the environment（定語(yǔ)從句）.

高分詞匯：
　　1 advancement n. 進(jìn)步
　　2 render v. 使得
　　3 witness v. 見(jiàn)證
　　4 exploration n. 探索，探險(xiǎn)
　　5 to the contrary  相反
　　6 granted adv. 誠(chéng)然
　　7 adventurer n. 探險(xiǎn)者
　　8 relentless a. 不懈的
　　9 unceasing a. 不斷的
　　10 breakthrough n. 突破
　　11 in terms of  就…而言
　　12 on the other hand  然而(表轉(zhuǎn)折)
　　13 sheer a. 完全的，純粹的
　　14 more often than not  多半，通常
　　15 in peril  處于極大危險(xiǎn)
　　16 companion n. 同行者，同伴
　　17 exert v. 施加
　　18 adverse a. 不利的，有害的
　　19 concede v. 承認(rèn)，讓步
　　20 irreversible a. 不可逆轉(zhuǎn)的
　　21 cautious a. 謹(jǐn)慎的

　　
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